self evaluation persuasive speech

I prepared the speech for about two days, I brainstormed a lot of topic, because there too many things that I want to persuade. Last speech maybe I use too much energy to entertain the audiences, so my speech seems like not very close to the topic. So, this time when I was preparing, I think I should give a speech that has some real information, not just funny, I want to have a deeper meaning. At first, I actually wanted to use the topic: keep trying, don’t give up. But it is too normal and vague. And everyone already knew this opinion for a long time. So, I decided to use the topic: jump out of the comfort zone. Because this topic more appropriate for the audiences, all of my classmates are international students, they both jumped out of their comfort zone. About the organization, I think my speech is organized, I think my introduction is too long, but I have my preview, also I have repeated my opinions in the conclusion. Nut my attention getter is boring and long, I still need to improve it. About my body, I think is not very clear, because in some of the classmates’ evaluation, they even don’t my speech’ topic. I think is because my topic – comfort zone is hard to understand, I should give some explanation. I don’t have visual aids, because I don’t know what material can show “comfort zone”? Maybe next time I can play a video to explain what is comfort zone would be better. I think my idea directed at my particular audiences, because through the evaluation from them I can see most of them know what I am saying. I use some examples to support my opinions, and the examples are close to our life, so it can make the opinions more persuasive. During my speech, I think I am not in rush, which cause my use 10 minutes to finish the speech. I did use the voice skills in purpose, I stressed the key points and made them longer. But I think the effect is not obvious. When I finished the speech, I feel relaxed, when I receive the feedback, I realized some of my problems, and the grades are not bad. I learned for the feedback that I should give some explanation about the comfort zone to make them understand better. I most pleased the example I gave about Karol, and I least pleased the attention getter, it is boring. 

Goal: to have a better attention getter next time.